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A blush climbs at my cheeks
Evertime I see him smile
I know if I need something
That he'd walk the mile

That voice is so soothing
So full of truth
So deep and wise
Yet an entierty of youth

His are searching
Tempting through mine
My stomach is churning
Heart leaps out of time

Moving a bit closer
Stepping more near
He's right in front of me
Not sure whether to fear

Entwines our hands now
Sends a jump through my chest
A hand gently releases our clasp
As my cheek is then carressed

Lightly lifts my chin
As he pauses, it is bliss
Savouring the moment
He leans towards me

The kiss

Lips forming to my own
Hand held across my spine
Embracing me, I've flown
And I know he is mine

Pulling me in tonight
Then the release
Though it's dark under the moonlight
All fears I've had cease

As I lean in him
We are one
I can feel the heat sink in
Even without the sun
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Not my usual depressing stuff. I guess I'm a sucker for this kind of stuff but I feel I'm not the best at writing it. What do you all think?

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:icontehmadcheshirecat:
The only thing I've read of yours but I love it. ^^

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"If I had a world of my own, everything would be nonsense. Nothing would be what it is because everything would be what it isn't. And contrary-wise; what it is it wouldn't be, and what it wouldn't be, it would. You see?"

-Alice
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
Thanks! I'm so glad you likeit. It's a little more positive than my others. :p

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"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
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"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconhagislilsaya:
awwwww its so pretty^^
dont doubt yourself your really good at this stuff

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:bulletblue::bulletpurple:[link]:bulletblue::bulletpurple:

I'm going to hell anyway, might as well make it worth it ;D
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
Thanks. Yea....it's definitely different though. ^^

--
"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
[link]

"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconmbryn:
Is there a word missing in your third stanza (first sentence) or am I just reading it wrong?

I like it, though.

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"Writers aren't exactly people...they're a whole lot of people trying to be one person." --F. Scott Fitzgerald.

"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." --E.L. Doctorow.
:iconcemexsar:
I really loved the words you chose and the way you expressed the feelings of a kiss, it's a fav! nice "stuff" as you said! really great.

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Si fumamos el tapete es porque se acabó el tabaco.
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
Nope, you're right. Haha, wow, how sad. My writing is even off today. :p Thanks for pointing it out.

--
"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
[link]

"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
Thank you. ^^ Haha, I used the word stuff? Oh no, that's bad. I wasn't in the mood to explain this one, so I kind of didn't know how to describe it. lol

--
"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
[link]

"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconshino122:
yaaaaaaaaaay!! love poems!!
i love them :love:
but what 'His' in here "His are searching" ?
but i really love :dance:, great job as uasul^^
:iconmbryn:
No problem. I figured I knew what the word was supposed to be, but I just thought I'd check.

--
"Writers aren't exactly people...they're a whole lot of people trying to be one person." --F. Scott Fitzgerald.

"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." --E.L. Doctorow.

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