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Three nights of crystalizing silence
Pace
Peace
Since the wind blows, there's not been a time
I will step into the sunlight
Beady eyes bring dreadful forthcoming
No twitter of feet
Beneath the brush
My soft
My soothed
Crowning deliquence, abiding crime
Knuckles of leaves
Cracking in correspondence
L    
o          v  e
  oms  o      r
Twisted mortal sin
Contershading candlelight
Soft

Lo! beware fore stillness nears
Lies beneath a candy shop

Care to come in for a treat?
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Author's Comments

I know this is strange. Still, I was told to post anything I write. Prepare for some strange stuff. O_O

What is going on with Bella's mind?

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:icontimlasure:
I love the flow of this. Reading it, it has me anxious to discover the next line.

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"A man's home is his coffin" - Al Bundy
:iconbellaezrebetfang:
Thank you. :)
I must say as I was writing, I wasn't quite sure of the next line either. O_O

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"God, we're off the rails,
now they drag me off in pieces." - elle-sophicles
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"I will make pilgrims of my fingers,"
- ScarlettLetters :iconscarlettletters:
:iconshadowsonwater:
You know, it took me about three minutes to actually understand the enjambment there :D That's really clever, I love it :XD:

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*TheWritersMeow - Where all the cool cats come to play.
:icontimlasure:
I think at those times, things come together more naturally in the end. :nod:

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"A man's home is his coffin" - Al Bundy
:iconeatingmyownfears:
this was great!
L
o v e
oms o r

:love:

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Don't blame me.

I'm just here for the cookies.
:iconeatingmyownfears:
well foo.
IT didn't C & P right but I stil love the way you did those 2 words. :)

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Don't blame me.

I'm just here for the cookies.
:iconbackuppanic:
:jawdrop:

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If God isn't dead, then I'll kill him myself.
:iconazura-adella-seryn:
Brilliantly different.

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There is only one place you can go to avoid God.
Hell.
:icontalking-pinata:
I agree with the others, the flow of this is very neat.

I adore the word play in a couple spots and I love the mix up of letters. It causes you to compare and contrast and for the reader to engage in reading.

The imagery of sound (if that makes sense) was almost a feeling (if that makes even less sense). The soft sharpness (if that makes the least sense of all) was very dominant.

Awesome. :)

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"Give a man a fish, and he'll make art. Teach a man a fish, and one day he'll have a pool full of exploding koi" -Neil Gaiman

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